Newest Blurb (09/14/2011) Because the previous one must not be adequate due to the fact I keep getting form rejections. Though, I won't give up! To work again!
(08/06/2011) I'm pretty happy with this one. One MC is focused on in this one, the MC the book leads with rather than trying to mash both Laura and Magnis parts into 250 words.
(07/28/2011) 250 words on the dot! After many hours of contemplating the phrasing and what words were needed and what was not, I came up with this. Fear not those who will query to agents/publishers, you too can do master crunching your story down just as I have.
(07/08/11) This is likely to undergo many changes as I get it acceptable for the query process. I hope it sparks your interest. In time it may shorten up.
Old (05/01/11)
What do you do when you wake up with a mysterious gash on your back and find a corpse that resembles your wife? Well… believe your wife is dead; in any case that is precisely what Magnis does.
During the hopeless search for his wife Laura's murderers, Magnis falls into league with a group called Nowhere—a capable band of mechanically enhanced fighters with goals that will change the planet. Finding it within himself to move on, he dedicates himself to becoming an important part of Nowhere's proposed New World Order.
Soon, Nowhere is attacked by a strange and powerful collective named The Institution, a well-organized grouping of people able to tap into hidden powers of the brain they call a spark. They intend to purge the world of its current race ultimately evolve humanity—and they'll be damned if Nowhere's existence hinders their plans.
Unknown to Magnis, a vital detail lies within the walls of The Institution; Laura is alive and in possession of a spark.
Soon, Nowhere is attacked by a strange and powerful collective named The Institution, a well-organized grouping of people able to tap into hidden powers of the brain they call a spark. They intend to purge the world of its current race ultimately evolve humanity—and they'll be damned if Nowhere's existence hinders their plans.
Unknown to Magnis, a vital detail lies within the walls of The Institution; Laura is alive and in possession of a spark.
Magnis lives by a stress-free philosophy, “No sense wishing the past was any different because you can’t change anything.” He never expected it would be so difficult to keep the same attitude when he wakes up injured with the remains of what he believes to be his wife Laura nearby.
His grief lessens after a unique encounter puts him in league with a group of fighters in an underground facility named Nowhere. Having raw strength and body enhancements in their arsenal, their sights are set firmly on a goal that will change the entire planet.
Before long, an attack on Nowhere’s base puts them in the difficult position of sending Magnis to investigate the group’s presence. He must discover who they are along with why they feel threatened before they decide to wipe his home out of existence.
While Magnis pursues his greater purpose, Laura is alive and on the other side of the conflict. She was taken by The Institution, a group of people able to tap into hidden powers of the brain they call a spark. They absorb Laura, as well as those like her, into their ranks to one day purge the world of all non-spark humans and ultimately evolve humanity.
Separated, yet so close to one another they even manage to travel a mere street width apart at one time. As they adapt to their new lives and take on various challenges, their organizations battle for the right to control the world’s future.
(07/28/2011) 250 words on the dot! After many hours of contemplating the phrasing and what words were needed and what was not, I came up with this. Fear not those who will query to agents/publishers, you too can do master crunching your story down just as I have.
Laura and Magnis are not as dead as they believe each other to be. The situation is forced into their lives by The Institution, a group of people able to tap into hidden powers of the brain they call a spark. They absorb Laura along with those like her into their group to one day purge the world of all non-spark humans and ultimately evolve humanity.
Magnis moves on with life after a unique encounter puts him in league with a group of fighters in an underground facility named Nowhere. Using raw strength and engineered body enhancements, they have their own set of plans for the planet.
An unexplained attack on Nowhere by a strong collective gives them no choice but to send Magnis, a not-yet-bulky recruit, to investigate their presence. He must discover who and what this group is along with why they feel threatened before they decide to wipe his new home out of existence.
Meanwhile, Laura’s constant reminder of murdering her husband is more torture than the shock therapy she endures to unlock her spark. Her depression lightens when she acquires control over her spark’s energy. Her control comes at a price, for now she is caught in an internal battle over accepting her fate and wanting to bring an end to The Institution for altering her life forever.
The separated couple takes on various challenges while they adapt to their new lives; all the while, their organizations battle for the right to control the world’s future.
(07/08/11) This is likely to undergo many changes as I get it acceptable for the query process. I hope it sparks your interest. In time it may shorten up.
Magnis lives by a stress-free philosophy, “No sense wishing the past was any different because you can’t change anything.” He never expected it would be so difficult to keep the same attitude when he wakes up on his bedroom floor with a gash along his spine and the corpse of his wife nearby.
Laura is not as dead as her look-alike, though how alive can she feel after being forced to cut her husband down and leave him for dead? On that dreadful night, she is assimilated into The Institution, a group of people able to tap into hidden powers of the brain they call a spark. The group’s leaders are collecting individuals with this energy to purge the world of those without to ultimately evolve humanity.
Magnis only manages to move forward when a unique encounter puts him in league with a group of fighters in an underground facility named Nowhere. Using raw strength and engineered body enhancements, they have their own set of plans for the world’s future.
An attack on Nowhere by a powerful collective gives them no choice but to send a new and not yet bulky recruit to the surface to investigate. Magnis must discover who and what this group is along with why they feel threatened before they decide to wipe his new home out of existence.
Meanwhile, Laura’s constant reminder of murdering her husband is more torture than the shock therapy she endures to unlock her spark. Her depression lightens when she is able to acquire control over her spark’s energy. Her control comes at a price, for now she is caught in a battle with her emotions between accepting her fate and wanting to bring an end to The Institution for altering her life forever. Things are further complicated when she must choose between her own happiness and destroying the lives of countless others.
The separated couple takes on various challenges while they adapt to their new lives; all the while, their organizations battle for the right to control the world’s future.
What do you do when you wake up with a mysterious gash on your back and find a corpse that resembles your wife? Well… believe your wife is dead; in any case that is precisely what Magnis does.
Laura is not as dead as her look-alike, though how alive can she feel after being forced to cut down her own husband and leave him for dead? That dreadful night she is assimilated into The Institution, a group of people able to tap into hidden powers of the brain they call a spark. They know she is like them and can help them with their mission to evolve humanity.
Without Laura’s presence Magnis cannot help but feel depressed on the subject of a solo existence. A unique situation brings him out of his despair and lands him in league with a group of underground fighters in a place named Nowhere. Using raw strength and body enhancements they have set their own goals for the world.
The separated couple struggles to live their lives without each other and experience further hardships, and even a few triumphs, as their collectives’ battle for the right to control the world’s future.
(Original Pre-Blog Creation)
(Original Pre-Blog Creation)
Magnis meets the morning sun on the floor of his bedroom with a mysterious gash on his back. Subtle clues cause him to fear for the life of his wife Laura. Injured, but determined to find out what has happened to her, he makes his way downstairs only to discover an unidentifiable body. Mistaking the body for his wife he is devastated by her supposed death.
What really happened to Laura is that she has been assimilated into a group of people that have been able to tap into hidden powers of the brain they call a spark. They have reasons to believe that she is also like them and can help them on their mission to evolve humanity.
After a short amount of time Magnis leaves his home and through a unique situation ends up accidentally joining a group of underground fighters. Using raw strength and engineered enhancements they have their own plans for the world’s future. 